俗话说写文章好就是“凤头猪肚豹尾”,考生们纵然做不到如此高的要求,那么可以学着给自己的雅思作文增加亮点。如何写出雅思作文考官喜欢的作文?
1、避免使用语言弱的“be”动词
1、在“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语
例如:
1) Weak:There is no opportunity for promotion.
Revision:No opportunity for promotion exists.
2) Weak:Here are the books you ordered.
Revision:The books you ordered have arrived.
2、表语转换为不同的修饰语
例如:
Weak:The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
Or:The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)
3、作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词
例如:
1) Weak:The team members are good players.
Revision:The team members play well.
2) Weak:One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.
Revision:One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.
表语转化为不同的修饰语
很多烤鸭不明白什么时候用主动,什么被动!用错了,雅思写作分数自然不高!这样做,也是因为这个原因!
例如:
1、Weak:The organization has been supported by charity.
Better:Charity has supported the organization.
2、Weak:The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
Better:Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.
使用具体的动词
比较具体的描写会让文章看起来更有说服力,分数当然能提高啦!
例如:
1、Poor:My supervisor went past my desk.
Better:My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
2、Poor:She is a careful shopper.
Better:She compares prices and quality.
不要使用语言过长且累赘的词语
写作不是用的词汇越高深就越高分,想提高成绩就要用词简单、生动。
1、Wordy:My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
Improved:My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
2、Wordy:We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
Improved:We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
3、Redundant:We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
Improved:We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
4、Redundant:My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
Improved:My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.
避免陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语
雅思是一门语言考试,主要考察烤鸭们的语言运用能力,而写作关键点就在文章的表现力上。
例如:
1、Weak:They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
Improved:They will not agree to any of his proposals.
2、Weak:I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
Improved:I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.